Farah is young and lashed out but you’ll have a chance to talk to her in the next update and hopefully reconcile her first impression 🙏 :)
I have also edited her scene slightly for the upcoming update to try to better insinuate she is acting hysterical for another underlying reason rather than just to be bratty
oh no chat it's another demo i've fallen head over heels in love with LMAO
no seriously i think i replayed this something like 7 times, just testing out all the different choices... so so so delicious, keep it up fen!!! sending you love <3
I am Blown away by what I just read. For just the start of this IF (- and your First one!), this was so Heavy and Powerful and Compelling. I *MUST* say: ‘Bravo’. A lot of people write on war and loss (or both), but don’t actually sell that terrible space and how it affects relationships. Yet you managed in the first few pages to really drive in the Very clear tragic and desolate themes in this story. The loss is Palpable to the MC; as is their Grief, Blame and Regret. I really feel like I’ve lost so much of my family and yet I still have to hold it all together for those who are left. (Or not! The option variety is so Good!!) The Farah scene was Delicious. Just Achingly visceral and Lovely. Respect for not holding back/making that interaction easy/neat. Phew….
Definitely adding this to my collection. Keep doing what you’re doing. I am Cheering and Screaming and Crying lol ❤️
🥹🥹🥹 Thank you so much!! I’m glad you enjoyed it that much 💖 Thanks for taking the time to share your thoughts and first impressions!!! It really makes my day. :3 I hope you continue to enjoy it as it’s updated! 💖
Ah man, Farah will not recover from this. I am not very patient around kids nor do I like them any so that probably influences this opinion, but boy oh boy I'd be so pissed. I definitely understand why she did it; she's young, spoiled in a way MC and Nour weren't, confused, and going through her own troubles but Christ I would just force the girl out instead of listening to her whine.
The beginning has me hooked. Special mention to the coding and music. It really add to the atmosphere.
Spoiler for first Farah appearance
Wish MC could cry out that it was Parim tea set as soon as Farah broke the tea cup. Because one of mine would instinctively said it and then go to gather all of the pieces.
While I could see another flatly/angrily declare it as they put away the rest to make sure Farah can't touch it.
Or more stern/Dignified MC trying (and maybe falling) very hard to stay calm and tell Farah that this tea cup belonged to Parim and how it was made.
But of course I understand if Farah breaking it is necessary for plot reasons.
I think another option when trying to calm yourself down that be neat.
MC asking themselves what would Parim do. Could end up working and increase dignified, gentle, straightforward stat maybe ? Or backfire as MC cry or get angry alternatively. Just an idea that seem appropriate.
I hope that if the tea set must be broken. That later we can repair it with gold with Farah helping. And then maybe put it on Parim tomb as a gift. Or better.
MC take Farah with her to Parim tomb as well as the repaired tea set. So Farah can apologize and present it. And after both drink tea and talk with each other as well as Parim and the rest of their siblings.
No problem ! I can’t wait to see where this goes. I checked the tumblr. And as someone on the aroace spectrum. Can I say how refreshing it is to have a world so accepting of us. Many IF creator do include us. (Some better then other unfortunately) But this time. Your world really give me the feeling that we don’t just exist. We are integrated into the world. And an inherent part of it.
Seriously the worldbuilding is so queer that it made me think about why more writers didn’t think about veering away from the more typical idea we have of marriage in fantasy/historical WIP.
Oh my stars. That was absolutely amazing. I am blown away by this demo. The prose, the characters, the setting and the customization options... top tier stuff. Sorry for gushing but wow I can't wait for more of this.
Good job! just finished the demo, the story is getting more and more interesting, the mc is also highly customizable (which you have my thanks for), in any case I'm super excited to see further updates!
Understandably a bad first impression for Farah, but she's very young and been struggling with a lot of things and immaturely acted out, but you'll have a chance to talk to her later. Hopefully that scene will help turn around that impression. :)
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This is excellent! i truly look forward to more!
Also Farah is such a brat, its incredible how much you make me hate her.
for real! i actually teared up a bit when i realized she destroyed Parim's tea set.
Likewise!
Thank you, I’m glad you liked it! :)
Farah is young and lashed out but you’ll have a chance to talk to her in the next update and hopefully reconcile her first impression 🙏 :)
I have also edited her scene slightly for the upcoming update to try to better insinuate she is acting hysterical for another underlying reason rather than just to be bratty
It's short and still made me tear up multiple times! The way you write quickly makes the reader fall in love with your characters
Thank you!! 💖💖💖 yay💖 :-)
oh no chat it's another demo i've fallen head over heels in love with LMAO
no seriously i think i replayed this something like 7 times, just testing out all the different choices... so so so delicious, keep it up fen!!! sending you love <3
🥹😭 Thank you!! I'm glad you enjoyed it! ❤️
…Wow. Truly. WOW
I am Blown away by what I just read. For just the start of this IF (- and your First one!), this was so Heavy and Powerful and Compelling. I *MUST* say: ‘Bravo’. A lot of people write on war and loss (or both), but don’t actually sell that terrible space and how it affects relationships. Yet you managed in the first few pages to really drive in the Very clear tragic and desolate themes in this story. The loss is Palpable to the MC; as is their Grief, Blame and Regret. I really feel like I’ve lost so much of my family and yet I still have to hold it all together for those who are left. (Or not! The option variety is so Good!!) The Farah scene was Delicious. Just Achingly visceral and Lovely. Respect for not holding back/making that interaction easy/neat. Phew….
Definitely adding this to my collection. Keep doing what you’re doing. I am Cheering and Screaming and Crying lol ❤️
🥹🥹🥹 Thank you so much!! I’m glad you enjoyed it that much 💖 Thanks for taking the time to share your thoughts and first impressions!!! It really makes my day. :3 I hope you continue to enjoy it as it’s updated! 💖
I don't know if anyone else thinks this. I hope we can say our childhood friend was our first love. If not it is true in my head cannon.
While mc’s relationship with Luca will remain platonic, you’ll be able to tell another character that Luca was your first love when you were a child
I'm so excited to read more of this!!! The demo was great and the character bios have me really excited for what's to come
Thanks so much for reading!!! 💖💖💖
God very rarely am I this captivated by a demo. The prose and the setting are soo good, really excited to see more of this story and your writing.
Thank you for playing!! I'm glad you liked it :D
😭😭 this is so sad
alexa play despacito 😭
Ah man, Farah will not recover from this. I am not very patient around kids nor do I like them any so that probably influences this opinion, but boy oh boy I'd be so pissed. I definitely understand why she did it; she's young, spoiled in a way MC and Nour weren't, confused, and going through her own troubles but Christ I would just force the girl out instead of listening to her whine.
The beginning has me hooked. Special mention to the coding and music. It really add to the atmosphere.
Spoiler for first Farah appearance
Wish MC could cry out that it was Parim tea set as soon as Farah broke the tea cup. Because one of mine would instinctively said it and then go to gather all of the pieces. While I could see another flatly/angrily declare it as they put away the rest to make sure Farah can't touch it. Or more stern/Dignified MC trying (and maybe falling) very hard to stay calm and tell Farah that this tea cup belonged to Parim and how it was made.But of course I understand if Farah breaking it is necessary for plot reasons.
I think another option when trying to calm yourself down that be neat. MC asking themselves what would Parim do. Could end up working and increase dignified, gentle, straightforward stat maybe ? Or backfire as MC cry or get angry alternatively. Just an idea that seem appropriate.
I hope that if the tea set must be broken. That later we can repair it with gold with Farah helping. And then maybe put it on Parim tomb as a gift. Or better. MC take Farah with her to Parim tomb as well as the repaired tea set. So Farah can apologize and present it. And after both drink tea and talk with each other as well as Parim and the rest of their siblings.
Thanks so much for reading and thanks for your suggestions! I’ll keep them in mind. :) 💖
No problem ! I can’t wait to see where this goes. I checked the tumblr. And as someone on the aroace spectrum. Can I say how refreshing it is to have a world so accepting of us. Many IF creator do include us. (Some better then other unfortunately) But this time. Your world really give me the feeling that we don’t just exist. We are integrated into the world. And an inherent part of it. Seriously the worldbuilding is so queer that it made me think about why more writers didn’t think about veering away from the more typical idea we have of marriage in fantasy/historical WIP.
So I’m following this very closely !
I'm glad to hear that! ❤️💕I'm also aspec so time to whip out the split attraction model babeyyyy
Oh my stars. That was absolutely amazing. I am blown away by this demo. The prose, the characters, the setting and the customization options... top tier stuff. Sorry for gushing but wow I can't wait for more of this.
Thank you so much!!! I'm glad you enjoyed it!! 💕❤️ :D
I like what you have so far, can't wait to see more!
Thank you and thanks so much for playing!! ❤️
It's so nice. I feel sad because of what happened to the mc's siblings, already feeling a lot of emotions while talking to Parim 💔...
the poor things...(i say like it's not me putting them through this)
Good job! just finished the demo, the story is getting more and more interesting, the mc is also highly customizable (which you have my thanks for), in any case I'm super excited to see further updates!
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Man this is actually amazing 😍
(=^･ω･^=) thank you!
this game is so cool I definitely recommend it!:3
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I love the demo, I'm really excited to see where the story goes ^w^
Thanks so much for playing!! :3
This was so good! I love your writing style, and I can't wait for more! :D
Thank you so much and thanks for playing!! :D
Loved the demo so much! Cannot wait for more!
Thank you so much!! I’m glad you enjoyed it :D
There's only so much understanding i can have. Farah has went past that limit i swear that whole scene irked my nerves to hell and back.
But so far besides that it's been a great if.
Thank you for reading it!
Understandably a bad first impression for Farah, but she's very young and been struggling with a lot of things and immaturely acted out, but you'll have a chance to talk to her later. Hopefully that scene will help turn around that impression. :)
Thanks again!
Omg i loved this on so many levels!!!
Thanks so much for reading! Glad you liked it!